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Grammar for exiting a building

Lorna

Grandmaster
Hi, does anybody know which of these ways of describing leaving a building from a third person limited viewpoint is correct?

1) He exited his quarters and headed to the pub.
2) He exited from his quarters and headed to the pub.

I'm not great on grammatical rules but the first puts me more in the viewpoint character's head. In the second the 'from' makes me think I'm watching him exiting from an omniscient perspective. When I'm exiting my house I don't see myself as exiting 'from' it. Actually, I see myself as leaving my house.

Maybe

3) He left his quarters and headed to the pub

Would be the best bet?
 

Steerpike

Staff
Moderator
I'd go with number three, of the examples you posted. Of the first two, I'd use number one. The "from" in example two seems like a needless additional word.
 

JonSnow

Lore Master
Grammatically, any of them work. #2 has the word "from" which is completely unnecessary. I'd go with #3.
 
3) He left his quarters and headed to the pub

This one. No need to complicate it.

Nobody actually uses the word "exited", anyway. It's: "Elvis has left the building," or "I left the hotel at 9.30, making sure to bring my sword-cane along just in case."
 

Benjamin Clayborne

Staff
Leadership
The entire reference to his quarters is unnecessary, unless the pub is also in his quarters. Tell the reader

He went to the pub.

and they'll assume he exited his quarters to do so.
 

Jared

Journeyman
The entire reference to his quarters is unnecessary, unless the pub is also in his quarters. Tell the reader

He went to the pub.

and they'll assume he exited his quarters to do so.

I'd probably go with this. And if you wanted to add some character voice or imply relative location, you could add a modifier like up, down, over, across, etc.
 
The entire reference to his quarters is unnecessary, unless the pub is also in his quarters. Tell the reader

He went to the pub.

and they'll assume he exited his quarters to do so.

Well, what if something stops him on the way to the pub? Then it's incorrect to say he went to the pub, and saying he went towards the pub when he's been established to be in his quarters sounds kinda weird.
 

Zero Angel

Dark Lord
I think Benjamin's got the ticket. Unless as Anders pointed out, the fellow is stopped on the way.

From the OP, I'd go with the third option as well.

Finally, although "exited" is rare, if this is your style then #1 would be the choice I'd go with.
 
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